I'm not sure what you felt was wrong with the original story line and/or art to totally revamp this comic (it was moving a little slow), but whatever. This revision is looking pretty good also. BTW, while reading your warning label on the side, it occured to me that if all comic that had "what nots" in them, most would get a MATURE rating also. :p
You'll see in a few pages. Generally when we reach 10 pages we'll have more important information covered than 24 pages of the previous version, and it will actually make sense (I hope).
The last version was not only slow, I realized that I myself didn't like it enough to read it if it weren't mine. And the only reason for making things you don't really like should be the fact that you're getting handsomely paid.
(it also gave me a chance to correct some things in character design that didn't click)
Since I'm doing this for free then it should give me pleasure ;P