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Pedes, January 7th, 2010, 5:39 am

Pajamas update

I'm so sorry, I wanted to update yesterday, but in the afternoon the Internet was down in the whole building. I waited till 2 a.m. and then just gave up and went to bed.

I am still too asleep to write a coherent comment. I can only say this page is one big cameo to Two Rooks.
Next update is scheduled for next weekend (16th-17th January) because I have some hellish schoolwork until Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday next week.

I also want to wish you a happy New Year again!!

...and now I can actually GET UP XD

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n (Guest), January 7th, 2010, 6:25 am

err... I've just noticed that you placed two guys with the same tattoo (which is not ornamental, so probably means something) on the opposite sides - one's an elf and the other one's a bodyguard to the guy who gets shot. (I'm not referring to which TR characters they are on purpose. Let's pretend I've never heard of TR and don't intend to read it.)

This may either look as if you didn't think before you drew them, or make the readers confused (or even make them speculate about what it could possibly mean). I think you should avoid such things when the characters only appear once, as an illustration...

(I also have no idea why I haven't seen it before 0o)

Other than that, the narration looks promising so far... :) Who's talking?

Pedes, January 7th, 2010, 7:22 am

Excuse me, I didn't understand the "Let's pretend I've never heard of TR and don't intend to read it." I think my brain is not able to accept such an idea...

I can do it becausethe characters appear only once.
Hmm, making readers speculate, that would be terrible, wouldn't it?

n (Guest), January 7th, 2010, 1:54 pm

I still think it's unnecessarily confusing; remember you can't choose what your readers do - some of them wouldn't know TR.
And making readers speculate about characters who only appear once seems unnecessary, too. It's like introducing too many overly detailed characters in a narration when you only need them as a crowd; that's why I'll be making major changes in The Nameless.

...but don't let it upset you, I'm just nitpicking. I tend to pick on details ^^;

Pedes, January 11th, 2010, 8:08 am

@ Senshuu
Don't worry, a couple months ago n couldn't see clues that were practically dancing on her lap until I pointed them out. Then she started reading Holmes and suddenly she sees clues everywhere.
As you said, in a fantasy setting it's something natural that people have tatoos and other things.
ALSO @n - they're on opposing sides in that moment (they're not enemies as such) so there is nothing illogical in the fact that they might something in common.

And you have to be NOOB in hints, clues and webcomics to pick at such stupid thing like that and while doing that SPOIL THE NEW READERS, THANK YOU VERY MUCH! *grumbles*

n (Guest), January 17th, 2010, 5:57 pm

I've made a thoroughbred idiot of myself again...? _-_ *goes drown herself*


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